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Krak
01-29-2003, 09:01 PM
The lollipop is crying.
Nevermore. Nevermore.
I've got the gun.
I'll do it! I said I would!
No.
Now the lollipop is there...
It's crying.
For me.
For me.
Wait! There's still hope!
The lollipop misses you.
Must we cry?
Of course.
Take it.
Take the gun.
You're in the darness now!
Oh, wait...
Wait...
That's just a duck.
Crying. Crying.
There's no more food.
Why'd he do it?
Fix the lint.
It's your fault.
The war ensues...
The nacho king has failed.
Nevermore.

What do you guys think?

deltabird
01-29-2003, 09:20 PM
it made me cry to be honest

Krak
01-29-2003, 09:26 PM
Thank you. Most readers were moved to tears. I was no exception.

BMJ
01-29-2003, 09:35 PM
The only thing that makes me cry, is your "word processor" :p

Krak
01-29-2003, 09:38 PM
Originally posted by BMJ
The only thing that makes me cry, is your "word processor" :p

Gimme a break, that was my first try at it, EVER:(

BMJ
01-29-2003, 09:40 PM
It's.... just not web-worthy!

Sorry... I still love you :D ;)

BigD
01-29-2003, 10:00 PM
I didn't cry!

TechWins
01-29-2003, 10:50 PM
A lot of people think my poems are good, so I'm going to put a few up. If some of you like them, then I'll put the more up. Btw, I usually write my poems in around 15 minutes; I can come up with words very easily.



Drift Away


Canít seem to find this
Itís so far away
Rising behind the clouds
Burning in my heart
The closer I get the worse it feels
Feeling so tired
Leaving this behind
But seeing into the sky
It only brings me closer
Maybe if I can get to the ending
Get past the part of far away friend
And seize my body to your glow
Letting myself fall into the flame
Nobody but me to blame
Donít know how this came
What exactly is this
A fiery sensation in my mind
Like no other kind
The burn turns me to shame
My body comes to a fall
Will you catch me before I go too far
Sunken into a deep haze of agony
Nothing to show
Blurred vision and not anything to see
What exactly is this
Show me the way now
The burn you give to me is all I have left
Let the flame come upon me
Burn my body away
And watch it float to a fatal existence
But even in death I will feel the burn
I will suffer from it forever
Now burn my body and drift away
Simply drift, drift away


12-10-02

TechWins
01-29-2003, 10:54 PM
Farewell


Not much left to say
Confusion has overtaken my body
Today should be a lovely day with you
Instead Iím going to be here all alone with nobody
It really could be a lot different
But there appears to be nothing I can do to change it
My high spirit is down for now
For you and I have taken a real low

What was your real intent
Maybe this was all a waste of time
But I donít believe that to be so
It may be at itís end
But to see it end is better than to see it never to have started

Where are we to go from here
Should I try to steer clear of you
Like you have done to me many of times
My poem full of rhymes did little to sway you over to me
Maybe I need to let us be

A tragic it has to end over such a silly thought
Only if you knew that I am different
Tried to show through many ways
To no avail you looked at me and laughed
Thought nothing of what I had to say
Went on with yourself
And left me behind with no consideration of how I feel
It for sure will take time to heal

I guess now is the time I say good-bye
To let you and I perish
And to never look back at the girl I so dearly cherish
Farewell my lady love


10-18-02

TechWins
01-29-2003, 10:58 PM
Light


Light raises my desire.
Why I'm so trapped in darkness.
No meaning to life.
No reason to be here.
But I can't get away.
No matter how hard I try it stays.
I hide but still there by my side.
It stays in a black cloud over my head.
Raining on me forever.
Nothing like you can imagine.
Empty thoughts filled with pain.
But I won't let it bring me down.
Even though the pain rips and tears me apart.
Light raises my desire.


2-99

Brian
01-30-2003, 01:57 AM
tin foil

i like chewing tinfoil
tinfoil tinfoil
tinfoil tinfoil

i chew tinfoil
chew chew
chew chew

i like chewing tinfoil
it tastes like polos

Govtcheez
01-30-2003, 07:16 AM
Brian is my favorite poet on this thread so far.

Travis Dane
01-30-2003, 08:05 AM
Aah, I get sick of most poems with there so called fake feelings,
It's all bull.


The world is full of bad things and whe are at the top of the list
so don't you go act like you care soooo much.

lightatdawn
01-30-2003, 10:10 AM
Well, this was in my pocket that I scribbled on a sunglasses warranty a couple days ago. Its not a particular favorite, but its near me so I dont have to get up or look for anything so...


Leisurly people
Smoke past steel and brick
Rain on them
while I listen to
Unaffected man
Uninhibited or unsure
of his sex

Nick
01-30-2003, 11:20 AM
Coffee is my true love.
Carefully hold her.
Bitter and sweet, sometimes hot and sometimes cold.
Others may play and sleep, but we are in love.
The sun rises to us and the stars are with us.

Travis Dane
01-30-2003, 12:24 PM
Originally posted by Nick
Coffee is my true love.

Coffee is unhealthy you know? (so is love)

GanglyLamb
01-30-2003, 01:13 PM
*me like time alot
*me also got meself a poet bout time
*me post it below


Time

Time
Sometimes time sure takes his time
And why do you think he does that
Cause he's invented by humans
Thats why time takes his time
Cause the creator of time does the same

Govtcheez
01-30-2003, 01:14 PM
Ick... No offense, but that was awful.

GanglyLamb
01-30-2003, 01:20 PM
man me is hurt now
damn id knew it from the start that this was going to be torpedo-ed to the bottom of the ocean:(

Travis Dane
01-30-2003, 02:22 PM
Originally posted by GanglyLamb
Cause he's invented by humans

That's bull, Whe where invented by time, And it's turn will
destroy us again.

GanglyLamb
01-30-2003, 03:02 PM
we'r invented by time no way
think about it each year you celebrate ur birthaday why???
because then precisely one year has past since ur last birthday

if i said today a year is in our year-counting-system equal to 3 years then we would have in our system a three-versial-birthday

i dont know what other ppl think about conventions about dates but IMO its how you put it for exemple
this year i forgot it was my birthday so i just went to sleep next morning i came to school and ppl (friends) were telling me happy birthday i said huh wich day are we today they said the 25
and iwas like really??

another exemple on time-crap-conventions

my brother turned 23 lately my parents said hey u know what why dont we go out with the whole family together to celebrate his birthday. I replied to my parents that they could go and have fun but i dont do celebrations things stuff like that. Because my big bro is really great hes like well. what i was trying to say to my parents was if i want to celebrate something ill do that by doing normal stuff. its not that my brother is going to love me more then when i went to celebrate his birthday.

yet another thing:

its new yearz eve-my dad and mom are going to friends to celebrate new year- i HAD to came along-we had dinner- we had a good time- then at 2:00 my dad said well go ahead u can go and celebrate new year with ur friends and make sure ur not home before us (still can remember him saying that) anyway i left the partie over there and when i was on my way to my hometown i suddenly realized that i'd like to be home at that time ... so instead of going to party i went home. dont ask me why cuz ill never be able to answer that question

i just wanna say with all this crap that time-conventions are crap in the eyes of a "human" being
now you can think wow ganglylamb what a wacko but in fact im not. All my life it seems that i just cant fit into what ppl may call normal society

an exemple of this is that im 17 becoming 18 who knows when well in ...;
anyway in belgium u can drink booze and **** like that and u dont have to be 21 or what age ever . anyhow lots of my friends always go out on friday night and saturday night i dont i just sit home enjoy life. if i ask my friends what the hell are u doing when u go out they say socialize. then my friends say that im an as-sociale guy they say i dont come out much and i dont have a personal and emotional life but its on the contrary
i myself think that from all my friends i know my capabilities and limitations and they well **** im gonna stop cuz i can talk and talk about this topic for ever ....; i even and go ahead laugh but i even wrote all my values and things to respect and whatsoever down on paper and its pretty much by now.

and another thing: respect-honesty are most precious things in life. dont ask why thats so important for me because else there will be another thread of about 2 pages long (and yes i also wrote down that respect-honesty thing on paper)

this is where it ends but an end is never an end an end is what u call an end

btw does anyone knows the filosofical theory about giving sense to things its like nothing makes sense unless the sense to a thing is being given by some sort of sense-giving person . then i came to think about it who gave sense to the sense-giving-person ?

::edit::
damn this reply became long

Travis Dane
01-30-2003, 03:11 PM
Originally posted by GanglyLamb
we'r invented by time no way
think about it each year you celebrate ur birthaday why???
because then precisely one year has past since ur last birthday

Remember that our date system is based upon the seasons,
seasons are based upon nature, nature defined time, nature
was created by.....ah hell YOU CANT ANSWER THIS!! Humans dint
invent time anyway.

deltabird
01-30-2003, 03:32 PM
ok i made a poem after a recent thread

quarter bouncing
----------------------

quarter bouncing, quarterbouncing
i love quarterbouncing

quarterbouncing, quarterbouncing
kick johns ass

quarterbouncing, quarterbouncing
its all in the wrist

quarterbouncing, quarterbouncing
everybody quarterbounce


THE END

deltabird
01-30-2003, 03:34 PM
in response to travis:

Humans DID invent time. Time is an idea we have created, it's not real, nor is it natural.

GanglyLamb
01-30-2003, 03:40 PM
cmon u cant say time wasnt created by humans time is such as money wuts money ..; wuts time
can you define time without pulling a human activity with it and dont go bout the season things
if u see that ice ages always come back then you could also say the period of one ice age is a year and so on. Time is invented by humans everything that is in a system is invented by humans that our job a s a human :to bring order in the chaos

what do people all their lifetime classifiyng things and ordering things who cares that there are 1000insects more or less in the rainforest =>NO one
without humans there would be chaos in the eyes of a human. in the eyes of a non livingcreature order existstevrywhere in the eyes of a living creature order has to be pointed out

it even starts with insects such as ants and B'z
they also have a lare why??? for defending reasons and others but why not a open lare?? bad defence?? NO
if a predator wants to eat ants then the best way is to scatter to be in chaos.

Look at the twin towers increase of population density is increasing order by increasing order u make the opportunitie to create chaos.Whats easier hitting 1000 ppl who are inthe same building with a plane or hitting 1000 ppl scattered over square kilometres ??

do the math and by saying do the math im wanting to standarize it so that evryone can understand it this way im making orde from chaos
if 1 would mean 2 then 1 wouldnt exist it would only exist as 2/2 in our heads but the thought of writing one down as 1 may not occur...

things are what you see not what other ppl see. damn this i dont see why no-one understands me...

Travis Dane
01-30-2003, 03:50 PM
Originally posted by deltabird
Humans DID invent time. Time is an idea we have created, it's not real, nor is it natural.

Whe din't created time did whe? unless time is just a name
for a phenomene.

deltabird
01-30-2003, 03:59 PM
There is no natural "time". We created the second, the hour, a day, etc. Yes, I know it is based on natural things, ex: 1 revolution of earth.

We created weight, mass, length, etc. All of these are things we came up with to describe events and/or objects.

lightatdawn
01-30-2003, 04:58 PM
GanglyLamb: Please, oh god, please try to use punctuation, spacing, and capitalisation in your threads. Your train of thought and grammer is jumpy enough to follow without having to wade through where one sentance starts and another begins.

I'm trying to follow what you're saying but you're making it impossible.

>>Time is an idea we have created, it's not real, nor is it natural.

Just to be a pain in the arse... Define "natural". Define "real" ;). (Both in this particular context.)

Travis Dane
01-30-2003, 06:24 PM
Originally posted by deltabird
We created the second, the hour, a day, etc. Yes, I know it is based on natural things, ex: 1 revolution of earth.

We created weight, mass, length, etc. All of these are things we came up with to describe events and/or objects.

So whe named certain events, that doesn't mean whe created
them? There would still be winter before whe would exist.

Nick
01-30-2003, 07:47 PM
Coffee is unhealthy you know? (so is love)

Maybe I should marry tea.

Commander
01-30-2003, 10:22 PM
Originally posted by Nick
Maybe I should marry tea. if you do, you will not live long enough to truly suffer from the pain.......

TechWins
01-30-2003, 10:31 PM
Aah, I get sick of most poems with there so called fake feelings,
It's all bull.

Shut up! I write poems to make myself feel better sometimes. I'm not hear to try to impress you with them. It's that some people like my poems. If you don't like them then fine, but don't call 'em fake feelings.:mad:

Travis Dane
01-31-2003, 07:55 AM
Originally posted by TechWins
Shut up! I write poems to make myself feel better sometimes. I'm not hear to try to impress you with them. It's that some people like my poems. If you don't like them then fine, but don't call 'em fake feelings.:mad:

Oke, Let me make my point more clearer, People write poems
with all nice feelings nice enviroments, with very meaningfull
words, but in the mean time whe all RAPE earth, bringing down
every single tree on the planet to replace with asfalt, kill animals
for no particular reason (pigs, cows) just so whe can eat meat.
I just get disgusted at people saying that theyre so good for
everything while they just join in on the rest on their way to
blow earth up.

jessie23
01-31-2003, 08:13 AM
but at the same time their are also more people out their planting trees, recycling and doing other things to benefit the enviroment. But back to the subject of the thread here is my favorite poem. It was written by John Donne, shortly after he was thrown in jail for marring an underage girl named Anne during the renossiance period.

John Donne
Anne Donne
undone.

TechWins
01-31-2003, 04:21 PM
I don't think you're referring to my poems then, Travis. If you were to read my poems you would know they have absolutely nothing to deal with happy feelings. If I'm happy I'm not going to be sitting around writing; I'm going to be out doing stuff. When I'm not so happy I might write a poem, because it's quite entertaining sometimes and it's more practical than doing nothing at all.

Btw, I thought you were referring to my poems before, because your post was only a couple of posts after I posted my poems.

Krak
01-31-2003, 06:46 PM
Originally posted by Commander
if you do, you will not live long enough to truly suffer from the pain.......

OGM, I'm pregnant!:eek:

ammar
02-02-2003, 06:41 AM
Originally posted by deltabird
ok i made a poem after a recent thread

quarter bouncing
----------------------

quarter bouncing, quarterbouncing
i love quarterbouncing

quarterbouncing, quarterbouncing
kick johns ass

quarterbouncing, quarterbouncing
its all in the wrist

quarterbouncing, quarterbouncing
everybody quarterbounce


THE END

This can be song for System Of a Down:D !

Travis Dane
02-02-2003, 08:30 AM
Originally posted by ammar
This can be song for System Of a Down:D !

Yeah, System of a Down made more...let's say.....odd songs;) .

Nick
02-02-2003, 09:04 AM
I will probably give these to a friend at Valentines.

Bottle at Sea
Read, to be Love
Write, to send Love
See, to be in Love
Hear, Love is trapped in a bottle at sea.

Lady Love
Did you really think your armor and shield would protect you
from my arrows? You have broken my first law, of which there
are several. Now the fire of my wraith is upon you. Serve in my army. Use the fire to enkindle others, meld two slabs of steel into one, and repair what has been broken.