Thread: storytime boys and girls

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    storytime boys and girls

    Yes folks, from the guy who brought you the "guide to being 1337", comes "Elsewhere", a story so epic that the author has only bothered to upload the first 1100 words to it.

    But first, I want to let it be known that I think that fanfiction is an evil ***** that must be destroyed at all costs, yet ffnet was more than happy to display this WIP with no fanfiction in it whatsoever, so I used the site because it is pretty big and will have many people with whom I can share my ink stains.

    So here it is. Tell me if I should scrap it and kill myself, or if I should scrap it and just be ashamed of myself: http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=475725

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    Hsifuorcs
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    Well, the only way thing I can suggest is that you watch the scene in the Shawshank redemption where the guy hangs himself and use it to learn how to do so also.

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    fantastic...

    i love your work!
    Do you know how contemptous they are of you?

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    Cool !
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    It looks to be pretty well written, Scourfish, but the problem
    I have with fanfiction is that it gets boring awfully fast. Sentence
    structure is pretty much the same from start to finish. The storyline clings unyieldingly to the main theme that it's been a
    bad day and is only going to get worse, again from beginning to end. So, I guess my problem with the story is simply that it's all salt and no pepper, you know, like all work and no play...? Keep
    what you have but inject a little variety into it, too. There's nothing wrong with a short sentence here and there, or a little
    digression from telling us about your bad day, a little aside, you know?
    Just trying to help.

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    sounds good, keep up the good work



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    Originally posted by rick barclay
    It looks to be pretty well written, Scourfish, but the problem
    I have with fanfiction is that it gets boring awfully fast. Sentence
    structure is pretty much the same from start to finish. The storyline clings unyieldingly to the main theme that it's been a
    bad day and is only going to get worse, again from beginning to end. So, I guess my problem with the story is simply that it's all salt and no pepper, you know, like all work and no play...? Keep
    what you have but inject a little variety into it, too. There's nothing wrong with a short sentence here and there, or a little
    digression from telling us about your bad day, a little aside, you know?
    Just trying to help.

    rick barclay
    Do you dare to call this piece of literary work, soon to be as good as "Requiem for a Dream", fanfiction? Hah! I have shat on the notion before, and I will now.

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    i equate RfaD to be a darker, more vain version of pulp fiction... very amazing film directing... like the truman show to a new extreme...
    hasafraggin shizigishin oppashigger...

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