hey p-morph, i jus got done this rough draft, seems were thinking on the same page : )
Ok, the new draft:
Computer Science is a field that I will dedicate my life too. It's not just a class, it's my career. I want to build my future on a degree in Computer Science. It's with this knowledge that I hope to design software that not only raises the bar for software capabilities, but that I can pride myself on.
As a second-year Computer Science student, I have gained a great understanding of the concepts of the field. These last two years have taught me the importance of not only developing efficient code, but well documented code. I have acquired the ability to create powerful and logical algorithms to support my software.
Computer Science has always been of great importance to me. This subject has not only opened doors for me, but has pushed me to think more clearly in my every day life. Programming is a passion I have held since I was six years old, when I began working with computers.
Over the course of my high school years, I have created many goals for myself. I intend to graduate from a good University, such as yours, and become a software developer for a large corporation, or for my own. I hold a strong desire to be more than any employer or I could ask for, and it is this driving force that gives me the confidence I need to achieve my dreams.
Thank you,
Steven Billington